Introduction Transcript 2nd Draft Evaluation

After the success of my first draft I immediately began thinking of ways to improve it thus getting me a better grade and producing an amazing production. To start I realised that i had included information about shot types. I find it difficult not to explain my plan however I will be removing all notes about camera shots. I also realised that I had integrated dialogue but had not put it in the audio column, I will be changing this for the 3rd draft. As well as this I will be providing a more in depth description about each of the characters and I also plan to use their names now so it is easier to understand. I was informed that i should always keep the transcript informed of what all characters are doing at that moment; I plan to add this. Finally, it was pointed out to me that i had included interior monologue (almost thought like), this is not necessary and I plan on removing it. Overall I plan to remove only small things as well as add a bunch more information which will help make my intentions look a lot clearer. Again I will be keeping to the same structure and as well as this I will not be changing any of the themes or issues. I have decided to stick with these as I am beginning to plan my shot compositions that will reflect these.