Introduction Transcript 1st Draft Evaluation

My first draft was a success. Many key components were included and many new ideas have formed from my initial idea. To improve for my second draft I must note down the location for each scene as well as to not include diegetic sound. This will be useful so I don't forget things and so it is clear to anyone who views my work. Another key element that I must remove is my own decisions (or directors decisions), I also need to change the introduction of our female character as well as change the way one of the male character acts. I will be changing a lot about my transcript but will be keeping to the original structure. A new idea that was introduced to me was creative titles. Normally I would have used Imovie to overlay some text however upon deeper thinking I decided that I could create creative titles. For example I could scribe some into a side of a tree (since one of the introduction locations is a park). Keeping with the theme of titles, the vanity title names could also be linked to the aesthetic, for example "green tree productions" would tie in neatly with the park location For sound I need to add more detail in that column as well as decide on some music to add in the background. finally I also need to provide a description about the appearance of the main characters. I have selected two main characters who are a boy who is very isolated and a girl who is strong and challenges this boy and questions his isolation. The improved transcript will be very different however some of the issues and themes will be changed.